Work continues on MILK RUN now that the plot hole has been repaired. Also, I received some valuable feedback and much needed encouragement from my Beta Readers on the improvements. Thanks Guys!
Your comments and recommendations are helping me make this story better as I near the completion of this military SciFi that’s bordering on about 51,000 words. I’m sure that the count will change once completed and the writing process moves on through the dreaded editing phase.
Speaking of editing, I’ve modified the story’s “hook” to show what this space battle is all about. Tell me what you think.
My New Hook!
Earth is losing the war against the Telrachnids, and Toby Nathanael Louis has just graduated from SpaceComm leadership school. His first mission as captain of the USS Princeton is to deliver a new weapon to a secret star base far from the battle front.
But what our hero thought would be an easy first mission turns out to be a test of his ability to lead a crew and ship much older than he* against an enemy that is using his own fiancée to destroy him, his ship and his mission.
Can our young captain complete his mission and save his fiancée too?
* OK you editors out there . . . is it he or him “against an enemy that is using his own fiancée to…”
Thanks for your input!
As always, I’m looking for more MILK RUN beta readers. There’s plenty to review at over 30 chapter/scenes posted at my StoryOrigin site. Want to become a Beta Reader? Click here then click the big blue “Request Beta Copy” button.
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